This poem is titled online, I would like feedback Please?
Online is a world to find
So much different than mine
Sitting in my quaint abode
This is a window to the globe
Allowing me to travel near and far
Chatting with people whoever they are
Some are fictitious others are real
All display just how they feel
Hiding behind pictures and avatars
Most desiring to be internet stars
Collecting friends to add to their list
Others killing time something like this
With your keyboard and mouse
Surfing the web safe in your house
There is no limit as to what you can do
Use your imagination it’s all up to you
Purchase those things that you want or need
Gaze at any image or if you choose read
With an internet connection and use of broadband
Watch TV or the millions of videos at hand
It remains open twenty four /seven
The only place I have not reached was heaven
You can chat around the world or the same room
Follow your favorite sport or see world doom
There seems to be no limit as to its use
You must be aware there is also abuse
Use caution when talking all the while
Perhaps you’re chatting with a pedophile
There is con artist, international scammers
Junk mail bulk mail and spammers
Sales people and ads at every click
Not to worry you will learn quick
I would be remiss if I don’t mention porn
It is everywhere it seems I wanted to warn
And brings me to the end
All that remains is to press send
way to nail it!!!!! i like it a lot
Comments
Comment from bladesinger0712
Time November 26, 2009 at 2:33 am
That is very very good – Brilliant I can even say and feel it is ok
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Comment from Joe K
Time November 26, 2009 at 2:43 am
very truly descriptive mr. vernathome. she is in santa barbara,, california, he is near lake victoria.. they void the distance by a click on the mouse.
a small village the world is.
very good poem writing mr. vernathome. t.y.
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Comment from Lady J
Time November 26, 2009 at 2:24 am
way to nail it!!!!! i like it a lot
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